In your journal, continue your observations of the scene observed in journal 1. Note several vivid action verbs that you have already used. Revise some of your sentences using action verbs and/or write 2-3 new sentences with action verbs. Try not to use any of the forms of “to be” (is, are, was, etc.). Underline the action verbs in your sentences. Again, you will want to keep all of these sentences at hand as you do the peer reviewed writing at the end of the unit.
Suddenly, Beth's twins fell off opposite ends of a large, rickety see saw......Well, here's to the Emergency and amazing, beautiful, and full of life children!
Suddenly, Beth's twin girls plummeted to the ground, falling high from the old, rickety, see saw....Well here's to another emergency room run with wailing, dramatic and hurt twins!